K.W. Mod.918 Lasergewehr

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K.W. Mod.918 Lasergewehr

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I won't be able to review this until Sunday, so if you want me specifically, you'll have to wait until then unfortunately. In the meantime, others can pick it up for review.
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Looking the weapon over, I'd say the accessories section is left conspicuously empty. Meanwhile, we could use more information in the discharge area. Namely, regarding the type of laser it fires, and the damage that it is capable of doing. You can look to the Type 8 Service Rifle I did for some ideas. When you're ready @Ham , let me know on Discord.
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I added both sections. I don't know why the accessories section was empty. Guess I lost that draft.

In terms of what type of laser it fires, I'm no where near to understanding laser physics nor do I want to bash people over the head with SCIENCE that they wont understand. I added an information blurb.
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For the forum record, I spoke to Ham regarding the article over discord.
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The article is now here as a result of some domain consolidation. Apologies! https://www.shattered-universe.com/doku ... _model_918
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I'll take up the review now that Cadet's absent.

@Ham we still doing this? I see you've got a WIP tag on it.
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Yeah, i think all it need now is a grammar check
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Bri finished reviewing this.
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