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by CadetNewb
Tue Jan 21, 2020 12:43 am
Forum: Wiki Workshop
Topic: Kitsune Form/Immortal Cyan/January 17, 2020
Replies: 6
Views: 2079

Re: Kitsune Form/Immortal Cyan/January 17, 2020

Alright, that makes sense. What we'll need then is a basic article about Genesis BioAnimation, basically a paragraph or two defining what it is and what it does, its relationship to Tai Pan (or lack of), that sort of stuff. This didn't matter in regards to the Jongwu since they're 'just animals' to ...
by CadetNewb
Tue Jan 21, 2020 12:03 am
Forum: Wiki Workshop
Topic: Kitsune Form/Immortal Cyan/January 17, 2020
Replies: 6
Views: 2079

Re: Kitsune Form/Immortal Cyan/January 17, 2020

Looking over the article, I think the main issue is that this is something that appears to be produced outside of the state. Though the Taianese would likely promote people becoming more like them, they'd likely want to maintain a close grip on their gene sequences or the implementation of them to k...
by CadetNewb
Fri Jan 17, 2020 5:20 am
Forum: Knights of Kowloon
Topic: 02 - 03 Kowloon United
Replies: 19
Views: 5009

Re: 02 - 03 Kowloon United

If Bob could sweat bullets, he would have. While keeping pace, the man-turned-tentacle-monster did his best to listen in to how they thought, and then slip thoughts into their heads. Thoughts that they'd think were their own, thoughts that they'd listen to. This lot of gits are boring , after all. I...
by CadetNewb
Fri Jan 17, 2020 4:20 am
Forum: Kowloon Territories
Topic: [Piyapon] The Return
Replies: 8
Views: 2382

Re: [Piyapon] The Return

"H-Hoshiko?!" the Tigress suddenly shouted in alarm. "Nononono!" Feline tail held high and spiky like a bottle brush, the woman frantically spun around, eyes feverishly looking for the high ranking Taianese officer. Failing to find her, the woman in front of Song dove behind the kitchen counter and ...
by CadetNewb
Fri Jan 17, 2020 4:07 am
Forum: The Black Forge
Topic: Chapter Three Epilogue: The Response
Replies: 1
Views: 1204

Re: Chapter Three Epilogue: The Response

Planet Piyapon, Soran Nast 3020 GSC "We look forward to your victory," came the reply. In truth however, it was not the Solarity of Kowloon's Empress, Lady Bhelith Blackspear of House Arleigh, that replied. No. Instead, it was a man with brown hair dressed in business casual. A man who had his appe...
by CadetNewb
Wed Jan 15, 2020 10:43 pm
Forum: The Donkey
Topic: [The Donkey] Le Joli Ânesse - Chapter 1
Replies: 82
Views: 14378

Re: [The Donkey] Le Joli Ânesse - Chapter 1

Farpoint Station 5, Airlock Lobby "Yeah, yeah, I'll take a look at 'er," older Gartagen lazily waved a hand at Rebeeka. As the head engineer went deeper into the station, he squatted down next to the disabled scout drone and looked it over. "Huh. If I didn't know better, it was just taken apart. Al...
by CadetNewb
Tue Jan 14, 2020 3:18 pm
Forum: Approved
Topic: Alliance Light Standard Armor
Replies: 0
Views: 1693

Alliance Light Standard Armor

This is just a quick and dirty article for the Alliance Light Standard Armor . Given the way the article is, its name is prone to change in the future. I'll leave it here for a few days in case anyone has any feedback and suggestions before moving it to the Approved area since it has Gunny's thumbs ...
by CadetNewb
Tue Jan 14, 2020 1:18 pm
Forum: In Setting Roleplay
Topic: [The Deep] With Strange Aeons
Replies: 71
Views: 13795

Re: [The Deep] With Strange Aeons

Ylfa had smacked the reptilian Jongwu off of her immediately, her face flushing red despite her attempts to look unbothered. "Hey, I wasn't reacting to everything with violence," she defensively replied to the turtle-man. As the gravel shifted and the strange azure breath came however, Ylfa couldn't...
by CadetNewb
Tue Jan 14, 2020 12:22 pm
Forum: Approved
Topic: Vanilla Honeysuckle/Immortal Cyan/October 29, 2019
Replies: 8
Views: 2654

Re: Vanilla Honeysuckle/Immortal Cyan/October 29, 2019

Ugh, I feel like an idiot. I'm very sorry Immortal Cyan , I didn't realize sooner that the production area is in The Alliance. This would be illegal for them I believe, though perfectly ok anywhere in Tai Pan. Strictly speaking though, you don't have to name the makers, or even where they were made,...
by CadetNewb
Mon Jan 13, 2020 4:15 pm
Forum: Wiki Workshop
Topic: K.W. Mod.918 Lasergewehr
Replies: 8
Views: 2522

Re: K.W. Mod.918 Lasergewehr

For the forum record, I spoke to Ham regarding the article over discord.
by CadetNewb
Mon Jan 13, 2020 2:11 am
Forum: Wiki Workshop
Topic: K.W. Mod.918 Lasergewehr
Replies: 8
Views: 2522

Re: K.W. Mod.918 Lasergewehr

Looking the weapon over, I'd say the accessories section is left conspicuously empty. Meanwhile, we could use more information in the discharge area. Namely, regarding the type of laser it fires, and the damage that it is capable of doing. You can look to the Type 8 Service Rifle I did for some idea...
by CadetNewb
Sun Jan 12, 2020 11:14 pm
Forum: Setting Discussion
Topic: Could Anti-Tank Rifles Make a Comeback?
Replies: 3
Views: 1565

Re: Could Anti-Tank Rifles Make a Comeback?

I would say that anti-tank rifles, or more accurately, anti-vehicular rifles, are viable in the setting. I would say that with them, the cost would go into the rifle itself with cheap ammunition. In comparison, missile launchers and the like would invest in the projectile but have a cheap weapon pla...
by CadetNewb
Fri Jan 10, 2020 8:39 pm
Forum: Wiki Workshop
Topic: K.W. Mod.918 Lasergewehr
Replies: 8
Views: 2522

Re: K.W. Mod.918 Lasergewehr

I won't be able to review this until Sunday, so if you want me specifically, you'll have to wait until then unfortunately. In the meantime, others can pick it up for review.
by CadetNewb
Fri Jan 10, 2020 5:26 pm
Forum: In Setting Roleplay
Topic: [The Deep] With Strange Aeons
Replies: 71
Views: 13795

Re: [The Deep] With Strange Aeons

As the world quaked and raged, the plants shifting to outline the vague silhouette of an inhuman figure, Ylfa swore. "Oh, you got to be shitting me!" Despite her snarl of growing anger and frustration, the blond held her place and did not move. Did not breathe. Did not blink as she quivered in rage....
by CadetNewb
Thu Jan 09, 2020 11:37 pm
Forum: Knights of Kowloon
Topic: 02 - 03 Kowloon United
Replies: 19
Views: 5009

Re: 02 - 03 Kowloon United

"Oh, don't do that! They really wanted me to play the evil tentacle overlord, I swear!" Bob lamented, covering his four eyes with a suction cupped arm. Sighing, the man-turned-tentacle-monster tried his best to explain things. "It's like talking out loud, sorry! But, I can do that to anyone that isn...
by CadetNewb
Thu Jan 09, 2020 4:01 pm
Forum: Knights of Kowloon
Topic: 02 - 03 Kowloon United
Replies: 19
Views: 5009

Re: 02 - 03 Kowloon United

There was a very strong feeling of Déjà Vu with all this. Like they had done this before. This time around though, Bob found itself inside the extra-large ammo pack, its tentacles reaching through carefully concealed openings to manipulate the body of a heavy weapons Atraxian. Clad in thick, cumber...
by CadetNewb
Wed Jan 08, 2020 10:59 pm
Forum: The Donkey
Topic: [The Donkey] Le Joli Ânesse - Chapter 1
Replies: 82
Views: 14378

Re: [The Donkey] Le Joli Ânesse - Chapter 1

The Donkey, Medbay "Flawed? Did you just call me flawed?" the medical robot suddenly rose from its charging port. "I'll have you know, I'm a veteran!" it angrily sputtered at Ztreviek. "Flawed! Hmph!" Despite the robot's protests though, Eydis heard Ztreviek and Jenna's proposal and quickly acknowl...
by CadetNewb
Wed Jan 08, 2020 3:36 pm
Forum: Kowloon Territories
Topic: [Piyapon] Business Opportunities
Replies: 11
Views: 4034

Re: [Piyapon] Business Opportunities

Patient as she always was, Sakamoto let Ori take her time to speak to calm her nerves before answering. "Well, I suppose it isn't obvious given your perspective, but let me ask you something else," Sakamoto began, still smiling like a cat who played with a mouse. "What would you see if I took my clo...
by CadetNewb
Wed Jan 08, 2020 2:23 pm
Forum: In Setting Roleplay
Topic: [The Deep] With Strange Aeons
Replies: 71
Views: 13795

Re: [The Deep] With Strange Aeons

The blood test stung. "Hands. Off." Grabbing the medical drone's syringe applicator with inhuman speed, she stopped it cold. "One, I don't appreciate just having psych drugs shoved on me," she began, the replica M45A1 in her other hand moving ever so subtly in Marble's direction. "Two, it'll do jack...
by CadetNewb
Wed Jan 08, 2020 1:17 pm
Forum: In Setting Roleplay
Topic: [The Deep] With Strange Aeons
Replies: 71
Views: 13795

Re: [The Deep] With Strange Aeons

"Huuuh?" Ylfa obnoxiously began questioning Hope. "What about the boo - " Looking at the old text again, the sheer depth of the problem suddenly washed over the blonde all at once. At first glance, her furious mind registered it as a frustrating annoyance, but now? Now that she took it in, Ylfa's ey...
by CadetNewb
Mon Jan 06, 2020 2:18 pm
Forum: Rework
Topic: Gnormiek Collective [Rework]
Replies: 1
Views: 1241

Re: Gnormiek Collective [Under Review]

Alright, I just checked in with Ahoy and since he's low on those creative juices right now and the article is unfinished, I'm moving it to the Rework section. Just make a new submission for review and a link to the old article when you're ready.
by CadetNewb
Fri Jan 03, 2020 4:27 pm
Forum: In Setting Roleplay
Topic: [The Deep] With Strange Aeons
Replies: 71
Views: 13795

Re: [The Deep] With Strange Aeons

Ylfa idly considered Hope's request for a moment as flame and leaf began to near. Normally, it wouldn't have been an issue since the Space Pirate Queen was typically flaunting her great riches and prestige, but right now, she was on vacation. Just chilling in a track suit and exploring something pop...
by CadetNewb
Tue Dec 31, 2019 10:07 pm
Forum: The Donkey
Topic: [The Donkey] Le Joli Ânesse - Chapter 1
Replies: 82
Views: 14378

Re: [The Donkey] Le Joli Ânesse - Chapter 1

Engineering "Yeah, yeah, we hear you! I just need to get our lunch-boxes first, so go ahead of us," 'Fritz' shouted back up at Rebeeka. The gruff Gartagen always wore his Edjia Armor , and as a result, looked just like his nickname given the integral gas mask and helmet. "I still don't know why you...
by CadetNewb
Tue Dec 31, 2019 2:10 pm
Forum: Rework
Topic: Gnormiek Collective [Rework]
Replies: 1
Views: 1241

Gnormiek Collective [Rework]

This is an ongoing review for the Gnormiek Collective a new nation for the setting made by Ahoy Looking the article over, the biggest issue is actually it's history. Since this is the face-page of the article, you only need a few short paragraphs at most to briefly summarize it. The bulk that you ha...
by CadetNewb
Fri Dec 27, 2019 6:03 am
Forum: Kowloon Territories
Topic: [Ivory Tower] Lifelines
Replies: 39
Views: 9612

Re: [Ivory Tower] Lifelines

To her credit, Xiulan didn't need to repeat herself. However, Fitzroy was still quite human, and as a result, the young Dragoness got to stand by and watch as the man's eyes slowly went wide as what the princess had said sunk in. Though, perhaps not just Fitzroy. Fate's continuance was was as stern ...
by CadetNewb
Tue Dec 24, 2019 6:06 am
Forum: In Setting Roleplay
Topic: [The Deep] With Strange Aeons
Replies: 71
Views: 13795

Re: [The Deep] With Strange Aeons

Ylfa continued to carefully examine the leaf in her hands, even going so far as to sniff the thing - it was just as she thought. "Yeah, these leaves, or maybe their juices really smell like gunpowder to me. And really strong too." Glancing up from the blade of leaf she was examining, Ylfa couldn't h...
by CadetNewb
Fri Dec 20, 2019 7:38 am
Forum: The Donkey
Topic: [The Donkey] Le Joli Ânesse - Chapter 1
Replies: 82
Views: 14378

Re: [The Donkey] Le Joli Ânesse - Chapter 1

The Donkey, Bridge "I would have thought the reactor would have had the same problem." As Yali stated her findings, Eydis couldn't help but rub her temples as she watched the footage of the man's suit coming apart again and again. Something about it bothered her to no end, and she thought that mayb...
by CadetNewb
Thu Dec 19, 2019 2:54 am
Forum: In Setting Roleplay
Topic: [The Deep] With Strange Aeons
Replies: 71
Views: 13795

Re: [The Deep] With Strange Aeons

Still squatting, Ylfa couldn't help but ponder the strange plant life, at least for a moment longer. "Smells like some sort of gunpowder?" she guessimated. "Maybe even cordite? Not so sure really," the woman admitted. Though she was carrying a slug thrower herself, the ammunition was at least a bit ...
by CadetNewb
Wed Dec 18, 2019 2:44 am
Forum: Wiki Workshop
Topic: Global Robotics [Under Review]
Replies: 2
Views: 1497

Re: Global Robotics [Under Review]

Noodles Lone_badass I discussed this on discord, but I'll add it here for record keeping. This article is about the product that the company offers, and not the company itself. Because of that, the info on this page needs to be moved into a sub-article dedicated to the product, while this page need...
by CadetNewb
Tue Dec 17, 2019 1:07 am
Forum: Approved
Topic: Sunshine Whiskey/Fox/16DEC19
Replies: 1
Views: 1255

Re: Sunshine Whiskey/Fox/16DEC19

I've looked it over, and honestly don't see anything out of place. Unless there's any criticisms, it has the green light.
by CadetNewb
Thu Dec 12, 2019 12:44 am
Forum: The Donkey
Topic: [The Donkey] Le Joli Ânesse - Chapter 1
Replies: 82
Views: 14378

Re: [The Donkey] Le Joli Ânesse - Chapter 1

The Donkey, Bridge "Go ahead and bring him in Ensign, and you can go ahead and greet him Lieutenant," Eydis addressed Yali and Jenna. Her attention was cleanly fixated on something else entirely, her words were more cold and distant than they normally were. As the XO made her way over, followed by ...
by CadetNewb
Wed Dec 11, 2019 2:46 am
Forum: In Setting Roleplay
Topic: [The Deep] With Strange Aeons
Replies: 71
Views: 13795

Re: [The Deep] With Strange Aeons

"Pfffft!" Ylfa blew a raspberry, eyes briefly rolling at Hope. "I'm not exactly 'in uniform' right now, so you don't have to worry about that," the buxom blond pointed out, tugging at the rather conservative track-suit that she was wearing at the moment. "Still, could you put like, a tiny-ass censor...
by CadetNewb
Thu Dec 05, 2019 8:16 pm
Forum: Hailing Frequencies
Topic: Infernal Hails My Dudes
Replies: 1
Views: 1799

Re: Infernal Hails My Dudes

Curse my overflowing inbox! Glad you're already settling in though. XD
by CadetNewb
Tue Dec 03, 2019 10:23 pm
Forum: The Donkey
Topic: [The Donkey] Le Joli Ânesse - Chapter 1
Replies: 82
Views: 14378

Re: [The Donkey] Le Joli Ânesse - Chapter 1

Far Point 5 Exterior, Holding Position "We're fine?" Eydis began to cautiously peek up from under her console. She almost looked angry at the thought thanks to the aggressive angle of her bangs, but given her attitude thus far, that was very unlikely. "O-okay. I'll take it then." Sitting back up he...
by CadetNewb
Wed Nov 27, 2019 8:03 am
Forum: The Donkey
Topic: [The Donkey] Le Joli Ânesse - Chapter 1
Replies: 82
Views: 14378

Re: [The Donkey] Le Joli Ânesse - Chapter 1

Having been pulled back up on her feet, the expression on Eydis's face was a dark and ominous one. On the other hand, it always was, thanks to how her aggressively pointed bangs partially obscured her eyes. "You guys don't understand," the Commander began. "We can get all the alcohol we can clean wi...
by CadetNewb
Tue Nov 26, 2019 6:14 pm
Forum: Character Workshop
Topic: Yali Whitman
Replies: 1
Views: 1418

Re: Yali Whitman

Gives a thumbs up
by CadetNewb
Mon Nov 25, 2019 5:16 pm
Forum: In Setting Roleplay
Topic: [The Deep] With Strange Aeons
Replies: 71
Views: 13795

Re: [The Deep] With Strange Aeons

"Tch, that's a bummer," the eye-patched woman replied with a sigh, disappointed with the I'ee's reply. "Oh well." Glancing at the man nearby though, Ylfa rolled her eye with a groan of annoyance. "Cutlasses were made for fighting in close quarters where there's lots a shit your weapon can get caught...
by CadetNewb
Fri Nov 22, 2019 4:38 am
Forum: Approved
Topic: Rat Form/Immortal Cyan/October 29, 1019
Replies: 5
Views: 2136

Re: Rat Form/Immortal Cyan/October 29, 1019

Approved!
by CadetNewb
Fri Nov 22, 2019 4:37 am
Forum: Approved
Topic: Vanilla Honeysuckle/Immortal Cyan/October 29, 2019
Replies: 8
Views: 2654

Re: Vanilla Honeysuckle/Immortal Cyan/October 29, 2019

It's worth noting that they'd fall under the high-end of Jongwu if they share the networking/VR abilities with their Taianese masters. Specifically point out if they have it or not, and that'll be that!
by CadetNewb
Thu Nov 21, 2019 12:46 am
Forum: The Donkey
Topic: [The Donkey] Le Joli Ânesse - Chapter 1
Replies: 82
Views: 14378

Re: [The Donkey] Le Joli Ânesse - Chapter 1

Like most big insects, their head of security didn't show up until he was least expected, and right up close. Which, of course, instantly gave the crew flashbacks of the very first time their commander had been introduced to him. "AAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAIIIIIIIiiiii - reAlly nnEed that Ahhxe tHoUgh!" Eydis...
by CadetNewb
Wed Nov 20, 2019 1:08 am
Forum: In Setting Roleplay
Topic: [The Deep] With Strange Aeons
Replies: 71
Views: 13795

Re: [The Deep] With Strange Aeons

"Reaaaally?" Ylfa began to reply, the hints of a viciously sly smile on her lips. Eyes sharp as a hawk, she quickly took note of how others were gravitating over as well. Some mercenary duder, a tiny kid in the back, but most importantly, the woman with the camera drones and the Jongwu blogger. "Wha...
by CadetNewb
Fri Nov 15, 2019 8:18 pm
Forum: In Setting Roleplay
Topic: [The Deep] With Strange Aeons
Replies: 71
Views: 13795

Re: [The Deep] With Strange Aeons

Explosions shook the ship as alarms wailed, and in an instant later, boarding craft bored through its hull, pirates streaming in before the smoke even cleared. Through the chaos, their leader strode in from the darkness, the choking clouds moving aside to make way for her majesty. Scantily clad in c...
by CadetNewb
Thu Nov 14, 2019 1:12 am
Forum: Approved
Topic: Rat Form/Immortal Cyan/October 29, 1019
Replies: 5
Views: 2136

Re: Rat Form/Immortal Cyan/October 29, 1019

It's looking good - the only complaint I'd have by now is the plethora of bullet-points in the lower section. I suggest keeping it simple and isolated to the key, most defining or unusual traits that deviate even from the rest of the Taianese. This means that you don't need to include stuff like the...
by CadetNewb
Wed Nov 13, 2019 5:38 am
Forum: The Donkey
Topic: [The Donkey] Le Joli Ânesse - Chapter 1
Replies: 82
Views: 14378

Re: [The Donkey] Le Joli Ânesse - Chapter 1

In an instant, chair feet slid and screeched across the floor, other seats simply toppling as people hurried to rise. Meanwhile, food splattered across the ground as disk-shaped cleaning drones quickly appeared, worriedly trying to clean the mess. Feet clamored across the hard ship deck while hooves...
by CadetNewb
Mon Nov 11, 2019 1:06 am
Forum: Approved
Topic: Vanilla Honeysuckle/Immortal Cyan/October 29, 2019
Replies: 8
Views: 2654

Re: Vanilla Honeysuckle/Immortal Cyan/October 29, 2019

Overall, a pretty solid article. I think it implies that this research group - which doesn't appear affiliated with Tai Pan proper - piggybacked/reverse engineered the Empire's Jongwu efforts to start creating their own as well. At least that's the impression I got, and there's nothing wrong with th...
by CadetNewb
Sun Nov 10, 2019 10:56 pm
Forum: Approved
Topic: Rat Form/Immortal Cyan/October 29, 1019
Replies: 5
Views: 2136

Re: Rat Form/Immortal Cyan/October 29, 1019

I'd suggest changing the "strikingly wide" to "slightly wider" or some similar order of magnitude in regards to the hips, and justify it as pelvic reinforcement to help carry large loads. I'd also suggest refining the enhancements section of the article. Though I do feature bullet points for ease of...
by CadetNewb
Thu Nov 07, 2019 2:41 am
Forum: Kowloon Territories
Topic: [Ivory Tower] Lifelines
Replies: 39
Views: 9612

Re: [Ivory Tower] Lifelines

As she spoke, Xiulan's senses prickled as they caught something; the man was occasionally snatching a lecherously aimed glance at Fate's figure, and very specifically, the angel's figure. Of course, any woman would have noticed, but she saw more than just that, and though these moments were less tha...
by CadetNewb
Tue Nov 05, 2019 4:02 pm
Forum: The Donkey
Topic: [The Donkey] Le Joli Ânesse - Chapter 1
Replies: 82
Views: 14378

Re: [The Donkey] Le Joli Ânesse - Chapter 1

As the others made their wants clear, Eydis counted who was voting for what in perhaps the oldest way possible. Counting on her fingers. Fortunately, she didn't have to use her toes, nor realize just how silly she looked. "Well, chances are, I think someone will eventually pick up the other jobs bef...
by CadetNewb
Sun Nov 03, 2019 7:18 pm
Forum: Setting Discussion
Topic: [Interest Check] The Deep
Replies: 13
Views: 3624

Re: [Interest Check] The Deep

Sorry, I forgot to post this! https://www.shattered-universe.com/doku ... a_diadottr

I'm imagining she's just coming in some sweats rather than her space pirate queen outfit since she's bored and looking for something to relax to.